let it seep into your shoulder, lifting them, fearlessly
let it seep up your spine, tingling, building up
let it seep into your lungs, swirling, twitchy
let it seep up your neck, shivering, excited
let it BURST into a smile, don't hold back, let it free.
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11 comments:
This is great room5iam!
Touching le marvellous!
Your really good at writing you know!
The only thing I would question/suggest changing is just this bit here - building up.
Perhaps it could be 'As It Builds Up?'
Other than that its brilliant!
Keep it up!
that is soooooo freakishly cool!!!
(im the first one to comment hehehehe!) its troy if your wondering you could kinda tell coz of the booya! comment on me blog! mynameis24 thats it
silly me make that second to comment!
Wow!
Tha was seconds!
Welcome to the blog booya!
I hope you have a good time!
This poem is still surprizing oven though I have read lots already!
(room5ian)Badabababa I'm lovin it!
yah it is freaKISHLY cool
thank you everyone! and welcome booya i will be sure to comment
Cool as poem!!!!!!!!
wow!!!! did you write this? what an amazing way to present the text - fantastic!!!
top shelf
i am so proud
aaaaaah! thank you thank you thank you!!!!!
yes you are on blog - oooh i wish i could type faster! oh well you'll get this comment! i love your poem!
thank you miss candy!
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